Day 2 Assignment 2: Show your memories, don't just tell us about them. Use the 5 senses.

Alright so today as you have probably already guessed was little harder to get writing. I'm not going to make any excuses, because I know that would be really lame since this is DAY TWO! Anyway today was kind of a melancholy day. I've always been told to show not tell so it kind of feels like a review right now...I really can't wait to work on my story. So like I said before I'm posting just a little bit of what I worked on today. It's by no means great, and it could probably be improved quite a bit but I'm at a point where I'm just pushing paint around. (Or pushing words around to be more precise). So here is one of the ones that I worked on today, it needs a lot more work but I'm not going to mess with it anymore today. It shows more than it did before at least, but I don't think I got all 5 senses in.

We sat huddled under the wooden computer desk as thunder shook our dark house.  I grinned secretly with excitement as lightning light up our small living room. I loved thunder and lightning, but Alex was trembling like a leaf next to me so I kept my excitement to myself. We waited silently under the desk for my Mom to come back down stairs to take her home. Mom was taking forever to find a flash light and an umbrella. I glanced at Alex her hands were over her ears, her knees pulled to her chest, and her eyes were squeezed tightly shut. Sadly I looked over at the window today wasn’t turning out the way I had hoped it would. I sighed softly we had been having so much fun before the thunder had started. I don’t understand what she finds so scary it is after all just sound. Mom finally came running down the stairs with a flash light in one hand and the umbrella under her arm. Her hair was pulled back and she had a warm sweater and jeans on. She shined the flashlight in our direction and gave us both a funny look.  “What are you two doing under there?” I smiled sheepishly and crawled out “we were hiding”. Mom motioned for us to sit on the stairs and handed us both our shoes, and then our jackets. Carefully she opened the front door the rain was pouring off the carport roofs and pooling on the sidewalk and in the parking lot. Our boots squeaked on the wet ground as we huddled under the umbrella and headed up the little street to Alex’s house. Mom knocked on the front door Alex’s Mom looked surprised when she opened it but smiled sweetly “Back so soon? Did something happen?” Mom smiled apologetically back “Alex wanted to come home, she was afraid of the…” just then a loud crack of thunder sent Alex flying into her Mom’s legs. Her little arms wrapped tightly around her knees and she buried her head into her Mom’s leg. Her Mom smiled “the thunder” and gently ran her fingers through Alex’s hair. They talked for a while and soon we were making our way back down the wet stairs to the sidewalk. I took a deep breath as we started for home again the air smelled and tasted sweet and fresh. We were almost home when Mom gave me a funny look “you aren’t afraid of thunder or lightning…so why were you under the desk too?” I glanced at her questioning face and quickly looked away. I smiled as I watched the rain run off the umbrella “cause she was scared and I didn’t want her to hide alone”. My face and ears suddenly felt a little hot, but that was the truth I didn’t want to watch her be afraid and I wasn’t sure what I could have said or done to make her feel better so I had crawled under the desk too.

 

Day Two: COMPLETED.